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 qiudanz technique is a proposal for a movement practice based on the computational transformation of sequences within a constrained vocabulary. it is part of a commitment to preserve computer science beyond electronics and industrial civilization, as a potential way of knowing and understanding emergent complexity in the universe.
 
-the purpose of developing the qiudanz technique is to share it and use it to create dances based on known and to-be-known abstract computational machines, like tag systems or turing machines. these dances would be post-collapse and nomad-friendly because they don't need material props and can be performed by small groups of people with diverse movement abilities.
+the purpose of developing the qiudanz technique is to share it to create dances based on known abstract computational machines, like tag systems or turing machines, or used to discover many more possible machines. these dances would be post-collapse and nomad-friendly because they don't need material props and can be performed by small groups of people with diverse movement abilities.
 
 in the qiudanz technique we will be working with linear sequences of movements from a given vocabulary. the first movement of a sequence would be called the "head", and the last one would be called the "tail".
 
 learning the technique would consist in becoming fluent in applying transformations to these sequences, e.g.: remove movement from the head, append movement x as a new tail, move tail to head, move head to tail, swap head and tail, increment, decrement or invert movement at the head, etc.
 
-there would be many possible ways of practicing, playing and/or performing the qiudanz technique. either solo, e.g. performing a new movement sequence each time by applying a specific transformation to the previous one; or in pairs or teams, e.g. one person performs a sequence and the other repeats it with an applied transformation, continuing back and forth, or one person performs and transforms their movement sequence as indicated by the transformations given in the form of movements by the other.
+there would be many possible ways of practicing, playing and/or performing the qiudanz technique. either solo, e.g. performing a new sequence each time by applying a specific transformation to the previous one; or in pairs or teams, e.g. one person performs a sequence and the other repeats it with an applied transformation, continuing back and forth, or one person performs and transforms their sequence as indicated by the transformations given in the form of movements by the other.
 
 our plan for a micro-residency in slomoco is to develop activities for learning the qiudanz technique. these would be shared in the form of workshops, written text and diagrams.
 
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 it is based on the belief that computer science can be engaging and has a place in human worlds even when happening beyond electronic computers. however, it also acknowledges that electronics-based communications can be a great way to disseminate the practice and to connect with an attuned audience and set of participants. 
 
-the qiudanz technique can be practiced in groups or alone, co-presently or telematically. it is resilient to, and possibly improved by, delays and errors in telecommunications. we would love to use electronic computers to share about non-electronic computing practices.
+the qiudanz technique can be practiced in groups or alone, co-presently or telematically. it is resilient to, and possibly improved by, delays and errors in telecommunications. we love the paradox of using electronic computers to share about non-electronic computing practices.
 
 the project identifies with the slomoco experiment and its micro-residency format in at least a couple of ways: